What I did yesterday
Date:~Tuesday 31 august 2021~
I went outside to have some fresh air,my baby sister was crying to go outside to my baby cousin and her mum(Baby sister is 2,baby cousin is 1).I was too lazy to get her out from inside the house,but i had too.When we went outside my auntie and her daughter was about to go inside but we just arrived outside of the house.She said she was going to get my cousins shoes and the balls,we played outside for a little bit and then went inside the house,my auntie and my mum had to cook dinner for my grandparents and the little ones,we had lam with pumpkin and rice,YUMMY IT MY TUMMY,after that we had a bit of rest,well some of us,some of my family had to go eat,they hadn't ate because they were too busy scrolling on TikTok , Instagram,Facebook and twitter,My lord please help my family i said,they came downstairs to eat,after that we watched some Samoan movies,OF COURSE,my papa had a lot of Samoan movies,well not a lot but it was alright,we watched some of them and then we slept,well not me,i was eating,i had a sleep after that,we had a family pray at 12,so we fully slept after that.That was my little story and i hoped you liked it!
Kia ora Calvary,
ReplyDeleteIt's great to see you blog about your Lockdown experience. I like your strong personal voice e.g. "My lord please help my family i said". Calvary, reread your text - can you add full stops and capital letters? This will make it easier for your readers to read your blog.
Looking forward to future blog posts,
Miss Laxa
Hi Calvary,
ReplyDeleteWow, you sound like you have a big family. It would be good if we knew a little bit about who is in your bubble. I am sure that would be a great story all by itself. Good try but I have to agree with Miss Laxa that you have to reread your text but I hope to hear more about your family, I always wanted a big family.
FROM MRS A @ NWS
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Calvary
It is lovely to hear that you have your grandparents and aunty with you. My children loved Nana living with us when they were growing up. With all the food being cooked and eaten I wonder if you had to help with the washing up.
I liked how you wrote in capital letters for some of your words for emphasis. Using more sentences in your writing will make it easier for the reader. I wonder if perhaps you could split your writing up by using paragraphs and use a capital "I" when you are talking about yourself.
I look forward to reading your next blog.
From Mrs A